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ziq OP wrote (edited )

Can someone post it to r/anarchism or r/antiwork so I can get more feedback since their automods won't allow new accounts to post and I only have a short window between creating an account and the admins banning it?

Preferably the patreon link which removed references to (metaphorically) killing (metaphorical) clergy so I don't get banned from there too:

https://www.patreon.com/posts/61841234

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subrosa wrote

I'll post it in a bit. You sure you want the patreon link there? Can have a "content creator here, send me money" smell to it, I rarely see patreon links get much attention.

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ziq OP wrote

Ok the raddle link then, hopefully they dont suspend u for the title

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subrosa wrote (edited )

https://raddle.me/wiki/_diff?to=e9a01128-3bf6-4754-8924-8168711c840a&from=3dea198a-a88a-45df-b737-86acc19c720d

Had a first go at it. American "Sunday Scaries" hour is coming up, but there's still some time to fix a few things.

Things like:

A similar anti-work movement exploded in the English-speaking world simultaniously, on the Reddit forum r/antiwork, which gathered millions of subscribers in just a few months.

to

Simultaneously, a similar anti-work movement exploded in the English-speaking world, most notably on the Reddit forum r/antiwork, which gathered millions of subscribers in just a few months.


Anti-work isn't merely the critique of work under capitalism as the reds would have you believe, or the push for better working conditions and nicer bosses as the liberals are pretending, it's a wholesale rejection of work in all its forms, whoever the boss is, whatever the form of remuneration and whatever the social or economic system in place happens to be.

to something like

Anti-work isn't merely the critique of work under capitalism as the reds would have you believe, nor the push for better working conditions and nicer bosses as the liberals are pretending. It is the wholesale rejection of work in all its forms, regardless of whoever happens to be the boss, whatever form of remuneration, whatever the social or economic system in place happens to be.

(The italics are cosmetic, probably not your style. That second sentence doesn't feel right, but I'm not sure how to fix it.)


the typo in

gatherer-hunter ban[d]s


have appropriated this very anarchist concept and tried to beat it into submission.

to

have appropriated this very anarchist concept and tried beating it into submission.

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ziq OP wrote

thanks, awesome having a proof reader

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subrosa wrote

I probably shouldn't play English professor. Not a good look. Smh.

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ziq OP wrote

i needed it, wrote the whole thing on my phone without spell check

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ziq OP wrote

Made a new account and got shadowbanned in minutes

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